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You've been moving across the country and came across a journal while you were stretching.
You open the journal and begin to read.

January 21, 1997
Well, my mom just bought me this journal for my birthday, it's better than nothing I supposed... though I really wanted that magic kit. Well, my name is Trixie! I love magic! I want to be the best magician ever someday!

Febuary 15, 1997
I learned some new magic today! I met a pony on the streets and he showed me how to create lightning clouds! It's a really cool trick.

Febuary 17, 1997
Dad signed me up for Celestia's Magic Academy today! I'm gonna go practice for my entrance exams!

February 25, 1997
I failed the entrance exam... I thought I did really good, too! I hatched the egg, I did everything right... they even said I did an amazing job! The just called saying I failed though. I think this has something to do with that pony I saw when I left. She was purple, that's all I remember, and when we left there were some bright lights coming from the room... oh well, if I hadn't tried I wouldn't have gotten my cutie mark the other day! ...I guess that's good... Also my dad took a look at my journals and said I'd been misspelling February. Whoops.

October 3, 1999
I haven't written in this journal for over two years now, so I think it's time for a few updates. Nothing really happened, I learned a lot of new tricks and I moved out of the house. Well, not exactly moved, more like ran away. Mom and dad have been yelling lately and I couldn't take it.

November 7, 1999
In the past month I came across another pony named Harlem. He's really cool, he's been showing me a lot of magic tricks. I remember meeting him when I went to try out for Celestia's Magic Academy, he failed also. Said he got kicked out at the last second also. I guess we're two of a kind.

January 14, 2000
It's been awhile since Harlem and I went our seperate ways. He got a job offering in a circus to do magic. They offered me the job, too, but they wanted us to dress up really silly. I still have my morals.

January 29, 2000
Still traveling... met a few nice ponies that took me in for awhile, but they looked really poor so I ran. I didn't them to waste there money on me.

April 22, 2008
I lost this journal a long time ago and couldn't find it. I found it in a shop about ten minutes ago. I should be more careful with my stuff. Well, nothing eventful happened other than I met Harlem again. I think he had a worse life than me. He had a lot of scars and stitches. The circus was apparently just a ruse for a sicko who wanted ponies' cutie marks for his own. Kinda happy Harlem's back, I was getting kind of lonely.

September 5, 2008
Harlem died. I walked into a cave as a joke at night. I didn't know there was an Ursa Major in there. Harlem sacrificed his life for me. He ran in front of it and told me to get away. I followed his orders and ran... but when I looked back to tell him to run also, he was dead. I ran for awhile, I didn't dare look back. The Ursa Major didn't follow me, thankfully, but for awhile, I wished it did.

July 8, 2009
I didn't want to write it down but it was the same thing for the past year. I came up with an idea to get money though. I'll use my little tricks and combine them to make them look big. I'll start traveling around and saying I'm the greatest and humiliate everyone else that dares to say they're better than me. I'm not taking pleasure in this, but it's kinda fun.

November 18, 2010
I came across a small town named Ponyville and set up my stuff there. I saw that pony that replaced me apparently when I had the entrance exam. She didn't do a thing to me! I guess she doesn't remember me... oh well. I decided to yank her chain, too, saying I defeated that Ursa Major that killed Harlem. I felt awful twisting the story, but I wanted to get a reaction out of her. Oh well, I have some servants now called Snips and Snails. I don't know why, but they really like me. I don't like them, but they're just being friendly, I guess...

November 19, 2010
Snips and Snails decided it would be a good idea to bring an Ursa Major into town for me to 'defeat' like I 'did before.' I was shown up by that pony again. I learned her name, too, it's Twilight Sparkle. Celestia's apprentice. She said it was an Ursa Minor, too. I played along and said I didn't know it was a baby, but I really did know it. I tried my best to get rid of it, too, but Twilight defeated in the end...

November 20, 2010
I'm burning this journal. If anyone finds this and reads it, I hope it makes you feel better about yourself, because chances are you're thinking your life it terrible. Well, it's not. Enjoy your life.

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What's this?
There's a letter attached.
You opened the letter.

Dear Trixie,
I hope this letter find you well. I'm sorry your life was harsh. If you find this letter, I will gladly take you in and teach you about magic more.
Best regards,
Princess Celestia

The letter looks old and withered.
You have no clue if Trixie went to Princess Celestia or not.
Okay, I was watching the Boast Busters episode after I Read Blue Tears(pokemon creepypasta) and I wondered if Trixie had a life similar to that. :U

The 'you did ____' stuff was added last second to make the letter portion make more sense.
Enjoy. :U
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J4B Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
A touching back story for Trixie. Quite the enjoyable read.
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redphienix Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Truly hope she ended up with a better life in this verse.

Great bit mate ;)
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BB-K Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, now that's interesting. No wonder how Trixie's life went terribly. :(
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weirdnwild91 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Wow, you did a good job on this! :clap:
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HiddenLights Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! C:
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weirdnwild91 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Student Digital Artist
You're very welcome! ^w^

Where did you get the idea to do this, may I ask? c:
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HiddenLights Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
To be honest, it was actually an idea for my own pony that could be kind of jealous of Twilight, but I thought it sounded like something Trixie would do so I just made this. c: Plus the Pokemon Creepypasta "Blue Tears" helped a bit because I had just read it |D
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weirdnwild91 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Oh, cool~ c:
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johnnybeg00d Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011
Hey, I really really love the idea of this. I am, however, sort of a noob at deviantart, and I am not too sure whether you can edit this or not... but anyway, I wanted to give you my full opinion on this. (I say this after reading you sort-of wanted it to be like creepypasta)

First and foremost, it is really well written. Grammar is very nice, and a plethora of sentence structures keeps it flowing nicely. I did catch one tiny mistake. 5th paragraph: "The just called saying I failed though." I believe it should be they. No biggy though!

Next, I want to say this. I realize this is a journal, and by the way she keeps losing it, I assume she does not care too much for it. However, it does feel like it could be fleshed out a little. Things like when she saw the Ursa Minor, perhaps mentioning how she was crippled by fear and the memory of her long-lost (and only) friend. Another example would be something like adding the aspect of humiliation she felt when they ran her out of town.
Another idea that struck me was that you mentioned her act as a way to make money. I didn't quite catch how it did. Back to what I said, it seems like more detail would really bring out the shine in this gem of an idea.
I could continue on with my suggestions, but they are just that. Mine. This is your story, and it is amazing as is. But, being able to expand your ideas a little bit will really help.

Anyway, thanks for this interesting view on Trixie's life, and please do contact me if you update it!

Best regards, Johnny.
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HiddenLights Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the astounding feedback! I defiantly wanted it to be longer, but I was worried a lot of people would look at it and this and say "TOO LONG DIDN'T READ" and skip over it. Someday I'll defiantly make another one, a LOT longer than this one. c: Well, not too much longer, but long enough to get the bigger picture and emotions. :'D
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